For writing my class hotspot writing I have been writing a story, I am going to show it to you here.
Today was good day, the sun was shining the birds were whistling, and the leaf’s where bowling down the park. It is just going to great, but she was not having a good day ,the first bad thing that happened was she broke her favourite bowl and her cereal went every wear what she going to do next… she was making the bed when she riped her sheet she new it was just the start of a bad day when her mum told her to tack her dog a walk in the park… she took her dog for walk in the park when , Her dog’s lead Brock and dog ran away she went after her dog all the down the park, when her mum called her to say you to come home quick they is a big problem the shelf thal down and cat is underneath the shelf….The end
Thank you for looking at my writing don't forget to lave comment.
Hi Hannah my name is Zoë I’m from Marshland School.
ReplyDeleteNext time you post something remember to revise because I found quite a few spelling mistakes.I was just wondering what did the girl look like?I liked the way you described how the sun was shining that was really good.why did the girl knock over her bowl and rip the sheets.
From Zoë
Hi Hannah, I like some of the descriptive words you have used in your piece of writing The girl seems to run into problems no matter what she is doing, even the simple things. In your next piece of writing maybe you could give your character a name. I notice that you keep referring to her as 'she'. Have a good day
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Deletehey hannah can you comment on my blog please.
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Deletehi hannah I like how you have pt in difrent problems maybe next time you could may be put somthing good that happens to her maybe her dog could come back.
ReplyDeletesorry just read it and I said pt not put
DeleteHey Hannah,
ReplyDeleteI I like your story, but next time you should check your spelling keep it up.
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